Dirty Roads and Streets in Pakistan - An Alarming Situation!

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Dirty Roads and Streets in Pakistan - An Alarming Situation!

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Post by saadmirza » Sat Apr 27, 2019 10:22 pm

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Introduction:
Street and road cleaning, that is also referred as Environmental Cleaning, is one of those major municipal responsibilities by which everyone in the city is affected but very few people know about it. It has become a major problem in the world but only a few nations are coping with this problem with good strategies. One of those nations is United States that has a huge network of sweeping and cleaning the roads and streets. UK, Saudi Arabia and UAE are also contributing to environmental cleaning and they have a lot of focus on this issue.
Keeping your community clean seems like fighting a losing battle. It is costly and time consuming and demands sincere commitment. In Pakistan, environmental cleaning and safety is one of the major issues. No standardised protocols for evaluating street cleaning technologies presently exist in Pakistan. Roads and Streets are not only unclean but are full of dirt. The whole country, except some metropolitan cities, is a victim of this curse. The reason behind this is not only the negligence of administration but also the negligence of the public. There are no set standards for the road and street cleanliness by the administration. People get the awareness of keeping their homes and country clean only during their primary level education and afterwards, nobody cares what’s happening around them. Governments and administration always do promises for the road and street cleanliness but the output still remains a great question mark.

Claims:

Claim 1: Road and streets in Pakistan can be kept clean if there is a proper mechanism and human resource in administration. We can keep our cities clean by hiring more sweepers.
Evidence 1: Studies show that those countries who are leading in the environmental cleaning have a good mechanism for cleaning their roads and streets.
• New York City street sweepers cover 6,000 miles a day at 8 miles per hour, and that is enough to crawl across the whole country and then come back. They actually pick up the litter and trash. They pick up dirt and dust and anything that is in their way. (Jaffe, 2013)
Claim 2: Roads and streets can be kept clean by placing dustbins and trashes alongside the roads and on the street corners for public.
Evidence 2: Almost every person uses outside food and drinks during the walk, ride and driving. They throw their garbage on roads and streets just because they do not see any dustbin or trashes nearby to waste their garbage.
• On motorways, we notice that the service areas are clean. One of the majorly raised questions is that are they not the same people who throw their garbage streets and roads when they are in their cities and houses? Yes, they are the same people and when they travel on motorway, they throw their garbage in the dustbins because they find dustbins and hence the service areas on motorway are comparatively clean. No doubt, administration and a proper network of cleaning the area also play a vital role.
Claim 3: Penalties should be fixed if people throw garbage on roads and streets rather than throwing it in dustbins.
Evidence 3: Many countries have fixed heavy penalties and fines on violating the road and street cleanliness codes.
• One of the best examples is Dubai. In Dubai, throwing a chewing gum on the road or street can even cost you Dh 500 based on the terms of local order No. 11 of 2003. (Throwing chewing gum can cost you Dh500 in Dubai, 2018)
• The violation will invite a Dh500 fine when caught for the first time, which will double, and then increases for each repeated offence to make litterbugs learn in the city.
• It is an offence to drop litter. Local councils can send fixed penalty notices up to £80 for the offence of littering as an alternative to prosecution in the courts. The Courts can impose fines up to £2,500 for littering offences.
Claim 4: We can keep our roads and streets clean by making new laws and implementing them.
Evidence 4: Studies argue that many countries have achieved the city cleanliness and have made their environment clean by new legislation and strict rules.
• The Municipality of Dubai urged people to keep their vehicles clean to avoid the fine of Dh 3,000, which falls under Law No (2) for 2012. (Dajani, 2017)

Claim 5: Awareness of roads and streets cleanliness should be given in schools, college, universities and even in seminars.
Evidence 5: Awareness and teaching plays a vital role in getting touch with a practice regularly. Teachers, parents and motivators have a great influence on people and the learning something on regular basis can shape the behavior of people.
Conclusion:
Pakistan is facing a major societal and environmental problem: roads and streets uncleanliness. This curse has spread all over the country and the administration is still unable to cope up with this issue. The present study focuses on the reasons behind this spreading curse that is creating environmental pollution and needs urgent attention by government and policy makers to make Pakistan clean and healthy. Claims are established in this study and recommendations on the basis of the practices of some clean countries are given.


Bibliography:

(2018). Throwing chewing gum can cost you Dh500 in Dubai. Khaleej Times Dubai, Dubai.
Dajani, H. (2017, July 23). Wash your car or risk having to pay a Dh3,000 fine. Retrieved from the national: https://www.thenational.ae/uae/wash-you ... e-1.613484
Jaffe, E. (2013, November 22). The Secret Art of Street Sweeping. Retrieved from Citylab: https://www.citylab.com/transportation/ ... ping/7675/
Street cleaning. (n.d.). Retrieved from nidirect: https://www.nidirect.gov.uk/articles/street-cleaning
by usama.ansari » Thu May 09, 2019 10:21 pm
a good piece of work on an important topic. i would like to add my observations and comments.
First of all proper Operational definition of Cleanliness regarding Pakistani cities is missing. Cleanliness is not just about ''JHARO PHERNA'' and piking up garbage ( plastic bags, boxes etc ). ''Sanitation Systems'' also plays an important role in Cleanliness, and this dimension is missed in introduction as the author wants to explore/describe in Claims.

Besides this Claim 2 (and i think others too are policy oriented claims ) and I want to gain authors attention that there are many cities in Pakistan where proper trash bins are placed in street corners and other suitable/justifiable places but people did not use the facility. this is a problem of Socialisation.

Claim 3 is did not makes scenes, people may fell good to pay fine rather change themselves. This is what is reality we have witnessed it in case of over sped Callahan on roads and in schools where even children feel good to pay fine when they get offer fine or ''Phanti''.

Claim 5 is most relevant and applicable.

Conclusion is missing.
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Post by Sana Javaid » Sat May 04, 2019 6:40 pm

a very nice way to present the intro but according to me the second line can be more justifiable as starting point of your article.
"everyone in the city is effected but very few people know about" not agreed.
writer's topic claim that it is an alarming situation but in the article( whatever, how much you wrote) it is not revealed that how it is the necessity of today? even what should be done is more focused.
writer use the comparison framework and have a nice gesture but evidence 5 looks like a claim not an evidence.
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Post by Sadiajamil » Thu May 09, 2019 1:21 am

Indeed the author had tried to highlight the importance of cleanliness in Pakistan and around the globe. There are few technical errors have been observed, at first, the key questions of the outline are presented in the conclusion rather in introduction. The concluding paragraph should provide the answer to the addressed questions in introduction. The structure of the outline is missing in introduction. At initial, the writer has highlighted the importance of individual to keep the environment clean, but established the claims while putting all the responsibility on state and legislation.

You may include the role of family and parenting, education and teachers, to keep the surrounding environment clean and healthy for all, as such habbits are developed through the process of socialization, and an individual's personality development.

I hope you find this feedback constructive while revising your work.

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Post by pakiza.jamil » Thu May 09, 2019 11:26 am

Its was a good write up..But i found a little flaw in starting paragraph..

"Is one of those major municipal responsibilities by which everyone in the city is affected but very few people know about it. It has become a major problem in the world but only a few nations are coping with this problem with good strategies. One of those nations is United States that has a huge network of sweeping and cleaning the roads and streets. UK, Saudi Arabia and UAE are also contributing to environmental cleaning and they have a lot of focus on this issue."

There is a little coherence problem ,in the starting paragraph author talk about responsibilities, problems and strategies.i think order is play a important role to explain our topic.
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Post by usama.ansari » Thu May 09, 2019 10:21 pm

a good piece of work on an important topic. i would like to add my observations and comments.
First of all proper Operational definition of Cleanliness regarding Pakistani cities is missing. Cleanliness is not just about ''JHARO PHERNA'' and piking up garbage ( plastic bags, boxes etc ). ''Sanitation Systems'' also plays an important role in Cleanliness, and this dimension is missed in introduction as the author wants to explore/describe in Claims.

Besides this Claim 2 (and i think others too are policy oriented claims ) and I want to gain authors attention that there are many cities in Pakistan where proper trash bins are placed in street corners and other suitable/justifiable places but people did not use the facility. this is a problem of Socialisation.

Claim 3 is did not makes scenes, people may fell good to pay fine rather change themselves. This is what is reality we have witnessed it in case of over sped Callahan on roads and in schools where even children feel good to pay fine when they get offer fine or ''Phanti''.

Claim 5 is most relevant and applicable.

Conclusion is missing.
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Post by kanwal shahzadi » Sun May 19, 2019 11:00 pm

Overall the structure of the essay is good... But i think the writer should work more on establishing claims and evidences...there should be synchronization in claim and it's evidence but it is missing... The questions should be answered in the conclusion not in the introduction...
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