Porn: A Chunk Of Fast Food

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Re: Porn, a chunk of fast food

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Post by isbakhan » Thu May 09, 2019 10:53 pm

Hey Sana
I really liked reading your article in which you have addressed the issue of porn videos in a creative way. You made a great start by describing the issue and relating it to the fast food. However, the statistics you are sharing needs reference. In this article, evidences are presented without reference due to which they are not making sufficient impact on the reader. A universal rule that academic writers must follow is to choose reliable sources to increase the authenticity of the article. The conclusion is detailed and providing sufficient information at the end of the article.
Overall, great effort

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Post by imisa2 » Thu May 09, 2019 11:55 pm

isbakhan wrote:
Thu May 09, 2019 10:53 pm
Hey Sana
I really liked reading your article in which you have addressed the issue of porn videos in a creative way. You made a great start by describing the issue and relating it to the fast food. However, the statistics you are sharing needs reference. In this article, evidences are presented without reference due to which they are not making sufficient impact on the reader. A universal rule that academic writers must follow is to choose reliable sources to increase the authenticity of the article. The conclusion is detailed and providing sufficient information at the end of the article.
Overall, great effort

Thank You
Good work Isba
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Post by Erum Sagheer » Sat May 11, 2019 4:29 pm

Sana your introduction does not deals with claim which is fundamental part of introduction. I have not found coherence in overall your writing. More over you quoted statistics with out any reference which are not acceptable or norm for academic writing.
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Post by Sana Javaid » Tue May 14, 2019 7:59 pm

thank you everyone, i am considering your points. I just gave the names of resources rather than full reference which is a mistake.
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